Do you want constructive criticism based on what I see already? Really its mostly just grammar.
Lords of Steel. You are using the word "there" when you need to use "They are" or "they're". Then you use it AGAIN when you should use "who made their kind slaves"
One suggestion might be to change "Lords of Steel" to something incorporating Bender's use of the phrase Shiny Metal Ass. Perhaps a play on words from the old videocassettes "Buns of Steel"...like Shiny Medal Asses of Steel! Call them S.M.A.S.h for short, in fact!
On the D.
.P description you have a space in THERE that needs to be deleted between the words "and" and "army"
